Shiva, the supreme God.
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There once was a boy who lived in a small village. His name
was Dhritil. Dhritil was very kind, but also very impatient and got bored
easily. His family was part of the lower class, but they were grateful people
that worked very hard. They appreciated everything they had and asked for
little.
One day he was running through a field with his friends,
they were running and laughing. In a moment of silence, they heard a small cry.
They didn’t know where it was coming from. They followed the sound.
They discovered behind a bush a small bird. The bird’s wings
were broken. The other kids played it no mind and figured it would just die and
they carried on with their day. Dhritil felt bad for the bird and felt as
though it deserved another chance. He took off his sweater and wrapped the bird
up gently and took it home. He showed the bird to his parents and they were
touched by his kindness.
The boy began to make a cast for the bird to help it heal.
He fed the bird and took care of it as if it were a child. After a week the boy
started to get irritated because the bird wasn’t any better than it was when he
found it. His mother told him that it would take time and that he would have to
practice patience. He read to the bird everyday, changed the cast out every few
days, and fed the bird.
After two tiring months of caring for the bird Dhritil went
to check on it but found that it was missing. He looked all around their house
for the bird. He accused his siblings of messing with it. He could not find the
bird anywhere. Angry, he ran away and back to the field so he could be alone.
Panting and crying and fell to the ground with his hands in his head.
“I’ve failed you.” He said regretfully believing the bird
had been taken.
“No you didn’t.” He looked up and he saw Shiva, the God himself.
“Shiva.” The boy whispered in awe.
“Yes, it is me. You have made me very proud.”
“I don’t understand.” Dhritil replied.
“You took me in when I was nothing. You helped me when you
thought I had nothing to offer. You heeled me through the kindness of your own
heart and with that you grew not only patience, but perseverance.” Shiva said.
“You’re the bird?”
“Every single day you heeled me with no complaints. You came
to me without question and nurtured me. While your friends left me and deemed
me as good as dead.”
“Why would you impersonate a bird and break your own wings?”
Dhritil asked.
“I had lost faith in humanity for quite some time. Men have
become lazy and entitled. Men forgot what it was like to work. Men forgot what
it was like to care. But you have proved me wrong. Some men are good and those
men should be rewarded.
Dhritil sat in silence, staring at Shiva in awe still.
“Your family will know good fortune. So long as your family
does not change and always remain true to their values will the good fortune
continue to bless your family.”
“What do you mean?” Dhritil asked but Shiva disappeared
before he could finish.
The boy returned home and saw his family crying. He ran down
into the house and asked what’s wrong. His family was crying tears of joy
because his father was offered a well paying job. Three times more than what he
was making now. The boy broke down in tears as well.
The family hugged and the boy looked up at the sky. He
smiled at the sky, tears strolling down his face.
Author’s note: Twenty-Two Goblings is about a king who finds
himself in debt with a monk, Patience. He asks Patience how he can make it up
to him and Patience asks him to bring a dead body from a tree. The king does as
he’s asks but before he could get the body, a goblin appeared and he found
himself in what felt like a never ending riddle/scavenger hunt. Riddle after
riddle the king always came back. Impressed with his perseverance to help the
monk, the goblin tells the king that the monk has gone rogue and his real plans
were to kill the king and sacrifice the dead body he was asked to get so he
could obtain the magic sword. The goblin liked the king so he told him how to
stop Patience. The king did as he was told (by cutting off Patience head) and
Shiva appeared and awarded him with the magic sword because of his patience, perseverance
and good heart. My story doesn’t exactly include a goblin, but I really liked
the idea pushing through a task even when it gets tough. Dhritil, also means "mean with patience" so I thought it was a good fit for the story. Thanks for reading! (:
Bibliography. "Twenty-Two Goblins." Arthur Ryder. Source.
Paulina, I used the Twenty-Two Goblins story for my writing inspiration last week! I think you did a great job with your story centered around Dhritil. If I hadn't seen the picture at the top of your story, I would have never guessed that the bird would end up being Shiva. Also, I liked how you built up Dhritil's family and his own background, so that in the end, I could easily understand why Dhritil was able to pass Shiva's "test."
ReplyDeleteOoh, what a thoughtful name and story! It's obvious that you put a lot of work into this and it really paid off. I really loved how you incorporated the lesson into the story. It was good that you showed how caring the boy was, but also how impatient he was, as well! It really contributed to Shiva's dialogue. Good job! Loved it a lot.
ReplyDeleteThis story was so sweet! I love how you changed the original story plot into something different, but something that meant the same and had an outstanding moral to it. I was rooting for Dhritil and "the bird" the whole way. I thought that it was so sweet of him to take in the bird, and I got really sad when I thought the bird had died or gone missing. This shows that you really created the characters really well, and gave them strong emphasis in the story. Great job!
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